In His Own World

May 16 2008  | Views 391 |  Comments  (15)
Now the old man had stopped feeling the ache in his back and the neck…. Even he felt the stre... Expand

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  yashasvi2001 posted 2 mnths ago

hi bhavana,

thanks for liking it dear....

regards,

 

yashasvi



  bhavna14 posted 2 mnths ago

tatzzz sooo beautifulllly expressed, Yashasvi... wowww luvedd d way u narrated d feelings of tat old man... n wat an end.. completelyyy unexpectedddddddd... 

rgds
Bhavna



  yashasvi2001 posted 2 mnths ago

hi Bina ji,

thanks for your kind words

yashasvi



  binagupta posted 2 mnths ago

yashasvi
v. touching n beautiful



  yashasvi2001 posted 2 mnths ago

Hi Raj ji,

I am so happy to see you taking interest and in making me  better writer with words, especilly my HINGLISH..... you know I had always been a back-bencher in that english period in my school days..... ooppsss......

THanks for your kind visit and the time an defforts you make in suggesting the errors and their rectification

I shall edit the blog now

Regards,

Yashasvi



  yashasvi2001 posted 2 mnths ago

HI Komlet,

thanks you for your kind visit and encouragement.
I wish to know how can I improve it further.

Regards,

Yashasvi



  yashasvi2001 posted 2 mnths ago

Hi Priym,

thanks buddy...... whenever I get a chance to listen to the chats of old men or the retired people, I always find them enjoying narrating their old days..... and then many times I find them  or I feel that they tell their fantasies as if they had happened in reality..... many or say most of them enjoy telling their fantasies as if they had happened in real life.

So I think these people fantasize much and hence the story originated in my mind too....

yashasvi



  yashasvi2001 posted 2 mnths ago

hi Poonam ji,

Thanks for your ever encouraging words..... I was fantasizing while I was hidden.

Regards,

yashasvi



  Raj Arumugam posted 2 mnths ago

The story took me into  its depths -and I was with the old man (with the character) and felt happy for him - and suddenly that twist in the tale! - it was quite unexpected and well-executed...

You do give us a clue - Am I real... and yet the twist is so real, beacuse the reader is deep into the story with the character...Well done! Excellent!     



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He would shook his head an close his eyes to find her in his fantasies =
He would shake his head and close his eyes to find her in his fantasies



She said with a naughty sile playing over his sweet lips. =
She said with a naughty smile playing over her sweet lips.



  komlet posted 2 mnths ago

yashasvi, emtional and touching story...........from the hills.....





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